Update telemetry.md

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@@ -18,10 +18,10 @@ We track general usage information about Astro and different configuration optio
 - Command invoked (`astro build`, `astro dev`, `astro preview`, etc.)
 - Astro version
 - General machine information (e.g. number of CPUs, macOS/Windows/Linux, CI environment, etc.)
-- Integrations, adapters, markdown options, and other select configuration
-- Errors during the build process
+- General configuration information (Integrations, adapters, markdown options, etc.)
+- Sanitized error information
 
-This list is regularly audited to ensure its accuracy. You can audit telemetry yourself locally by settings the `DEBUG=”astro:telemetry”` environment variable when running the Astro CLI.
+This list is regularly audited to ensure its accuracy. You can audit telemetry yourself locally by settings the `DEBUG=”astro:telemetry”` environment variable when running the Astro CLI. While in debug mode, telemetry events ares only logged to the console.
 
 An example telemetry event might look like this:
 
@@ -41,19 +41,19 @@ An example telemetry event might look like this:
 
 ## What about sensitive data?
 
-We **do not** collect any metrics which may contain sensitive data. This includes, but is not limited to: environment variables, personally identifiable information, file paths, contents of files, logs, stack traces, git remote information, or un-serialized JavaScript error messages.
+We **do not** collect any metrics which may contain sensitive data. This includes, but is not limited to: environment variables, personally identifiable information, file paths, contents of files, logs, stack traces, git remote information, or unsanitized JavaScript error messages.
 
 We take your privacy very seriously. You can read our [privacy policy](https://astro.build/privacy/) to learn more.
 
 ## How is my data protected?
 
 The data collected by the Astro CLI is completely anonymous and only meaningful in aggregate form. The data that we store is not traceable to the source, and is only available to a small subset of the Astro core maintainer team to help inform our roadmap prioritization.
 
-None of the data that we collect is personally identifiable. It has never and will never be sold or monetized in any form.
+The Astro CLI does not track, collect, or store personally identifiable information (PII). The telemetry data that we do track has never and will never be sold or monetized in any form.
 
 ## How do I opt out?
 
-You can also opt-out by running `astro telemetry disable` in the root of any Astro project directory:
+You can always opt-out by running `astro telemetry disable` in the root of any Astro project directory:
 
 ```bash
 npx astro telemetry disable