From 0f426ad75df0dfade989c2e9ff6f249825adad7b Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Tanja Roth Date: Mon, 3 Dec 2012 14:03:30 +0000 Subject: [PATCH] all language proofing feedback for End User Guide is in git-svn-id: http://svn.suse.de/svn/doc/trunk/cloud/en@56297 2463f871-af05-0410-bd21-ebfa852e3ce4 --- xml/phrases-decl.ent | 2 +- xml/user_cli.xml | 28 ++++++++++++++-------------- 2 files changed, 15 insertions(+), 15 deletions(-) diff --git a/xml/phrases-decl.ent b/xml/phrases-decl.ent index 4b6989cef..64d8a1e43 100644 --- a/xml/phrases-decl.ent +++ b/xml/phrases-decl.ent @@ -222,7 +222,7 @@ Copy the openrc.sh file to the machine on which - you want execute &ostack; commands (for example, uploading an image + you want to execute &ostack; commands (for example, uploading an image with the glance command). diff --git a/xml/user_cli.xml b/xml/user_cli.xml index 16ad38893..ca853be59 100644 --- a/xml/user_cli.xml +++ b/xml/user_cli.xml @@ -118,7 +118,7 @@ Look up the available security groups: nova secgroup-list - If you did not create any specific security groups, you can only assign + If you have not created any specific security groups, you can only assign the instance to the default security group. @@ -126,7 +126,7 @@ nova keypair-list - Now you have all parameters at hand for starting an instance. Do so + Now you have all the parameters at hand for starting an instance. Do so with the following command: nova boot --flavor FLAVOR_ID --imageIMAGE_ID --key_name KEY_NAME \ --security_group NAME_OF_SEC_GROUP NAME_FOR_INSTANCE  @@ -138,16 +138,16 @@ Check if the instance is online: nova list This command lists all instances of the project you belong to, including - their ID, their name, their status and their private (and if assigned) - their public IP addresses. If your instance's status is ACTIVE, + their ID, their name, their status, and their private (and if assigned, + their public) IP addresses. If your instance's status is ACTIVE, the instance is online. - To refine the search, run nove help list to view + To refine the search, run nova help list to view the available options for the command. - If you did not provide a keypair on start and did not touch security groups + If you did not provide a keypair on starting and have not touched security groups or rules so far, by default the instance can only be accessed from inside the cloud via VNC at this point. Even pinging the instance is not possible. To change this, proceed with . @@ -161,7 +161,7 @@ Creating or Importing Keys &keypairs; In case an image uses a static &rootuser; password or a static key set - (neither is recommended), you do not need to provide a keypair on start of + (neither is recommended), you do not need to provide a keypair on starting of the instance. @@ -359,7 +359,7 @@ $ ssh-keygen -l -f ~/.ssh/id_rsa.pub - To allow access via UDP port (for example, for an DNS server + To allow access via UDP port (for example, for a DNS server running on a VM): @@ -466,7 +466,7 @@ $ ssh-keygen -l -f ~/.ssh/id_rsa.pub - Listing Pools with Floating IP Adresses + Listing Pools with Floating IP Addresses nova floating-ip-pool-list @@ -491,8 +491,8 @@ $ ssh-keygen -l -f ~/.ssh/id_rsa.pub nova floating-ip-list Lists all floating IP addresses that have been allocated to the current - project. If an IP is already associated to an instance, the output - also shows the instance's IP, the instance's fixed IP adress and the name of + project. If an IP is already associated with an instance, the output + also shows the instance's IP, the instance's fixed IP address and the name of the pool that provides the floating IP address. @@ -502,7 +502,7 @@ $ ssh-keygen -l -f ~/.ssh/id_rsa.pub nova floating-ip-delete FLOATING_IP  The IP address is put back into the pool of IP addresses that are available for all projects. If an IP address is currently assigned - to a running instance, it will automatically be dissociated from the + to a running instance, it will automatically be disassociated from the instance. @@ -510,7 +510,7 @@ $ ssh-keygen -l -f ~/.ssh/id_rsa.pub Assigning a Floating IP Address to an Instance nova add-floating-ip INSTANCE_NAME_OR_ID FLOATING_IP  - To associate an IP address to an instance, one or multiple floating IP + To associate an IP address with an instance, one or multiple floating IP addresses must have been allocated to the current project. Check this with nova floating-ip-list. In addition, you need to know the instance's name (or ID). To look up the instances that belong to the current @@ -524,7 +524,7 @@ $ ssh-keygen -l -f ~/.ssh/id_rsa.pub - Removing a Floating IP address from an Instance + Removing a Floating IP Address from an Instance nova remove-floating-ip INSTANCE_NAME_OR_ID FLOATING_IP  To remove a floating IP address from an instance, you need to specify